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I'm trying to escape,
trying to get away,
trying to ignore what they do,
forget about what they say.

No move I ever make,
can ever be one right,
every simple thing I say,
always starts a fight.

I'm sorry I'm not perfect,
the way I'm supposed to be,
the thing is your slowly killing me,
why can't you see?

I'd really like to run away,
where someone would understand,
to someone who could see my pain,
and gently take my hand.
a not-so-great poem about getting away.
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pjgr4ever Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013
This is beautifully written.
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writerbeliever Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
I agree with the other comments. I have this poem on my favourites page. It is very expressive and would make good lyrics for a song. It is very good. Follow your heart and keep writing!
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Misteriouswriter7 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no poem is not-so-great
A writer can't judge his or her own poetry
Because we always look down upon it
So thank you for the poem, about getting away
The dream all of us share
And we all write about, as crappy as we can :P

Keep writing..
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PurpleHaze96 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my God, this is PERFECT! Love it!
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RDS47 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I feel the tension. Love it.
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Orphen3rx Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
I like it and agree, it leaves you wanting more.
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Nyah-the-hedgehog Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i have no words for how awesome this is
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LeafPen Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's very relate able, everyone at sometime or another wants to get out of what's going on in their life. I really like it.
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ZandaryHyll Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Student Writer
School life really can suck for many people. But sometimes a light can be seen at the other end of the tunnel of education.
All we have to do is hope for the best, keep our fingers crossed, and hold hands with our imaginary freinds.
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KyuuketsukiNoShouzo Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
now I know why i hated my school life so much.... :cry:
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kagurawind Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
Omg love it
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grvrulz Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Professional General Artist
Love this
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quinnypin Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2011  Student Writer
I love this, I really do - the only thing letting it down is misuse of your/you're ("the thing is your slowly killing me" should be "the thing is you're slowly killing me") which grates a little. Overall though this is a nice piece, the rhyme and rhythm work well and as one commenter said above, I think it would work just as well as lyrics as it does as a poem. :)
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fragilehour Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
After reading this, I apologise for slating you as a poet on your other poem ("Is it Love?"). I don't take back what I say about that one being meaningless and quite shallow in depth, but you obviously have some talent. This poem has a nice flow and, although still pretty cliché, has a meaning. Write more like this! :3
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truthbehinedtruth Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2010
I think it's great.
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AKDamselinDistress Featured By Owner May 3, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
This so fully expresses how I feel as I am leaving a 26 year marriage. Love this poem.
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xangelxofxinnocencex Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2009
I love your work!!! :D
You express a lot of emotion in very few words. Good Job!!
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monik10sushilover Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2009
i really love your poems :) :heart:
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mistyvision Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2006
nice, yet short so it leaves us begging for more
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ChAzZeH Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2006  Hobbyist Photographer
it is good but short. that could even b a song. its like what youve written is the beginning of sumthing. i think it has potential =)
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brokenxbeauty Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2006  Student
thanks :)
ohh, a song, eh? I like that idea.
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