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I'm trying to escape,
trying to get away,
trying to ignore what they do,
forget about what they say.

No move I ever make,
can ever be one right,
every simple thing I say,
always starts a fight.

I'm sorry I'm not perfect,
the way I'm supposed to be,
the thing is your slowly killing me,
why can't you see?

I'd really like to run away,
where someone would understand,
to someone who could see my pain,
and gently take my hand.
a not-so-great poem about getting away.
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:iconpjgr4ever:
This is beautifully written.
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:iconwriterbeliever:
I agree with the other comments. I have this poem on my favourites page. It is very expressive and would make good lyrics for a song. It is very good. Follow your heart and keep writing!
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Misteriouswriter7 Apr 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no poem is not-so-great
A writer can't judge his or her own poetry
Because we always look down upon it
So thank you for the poem, about getting away
The dream all of us share
And we all write about, as crappy as we can :P

Keep writing..
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PurpleHaze96 Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my God, this is PERFECT! Love it!
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RDS47 Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I feel the tension. Love it.
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:iconorphen3rx:
I like it and agree, it leaves you wanting more.
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Nyah-the-hedgehog Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i have no words for how awesome this is
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LeafPen Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's very relate able, everyone at sometime or another wants to get out of what's going on in their life. I really like it.
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ZandaryHyll Jan 28, 2013  Student Writer
School life really can suck for many people. But sometimes a light can be seen at the other end of the tunnel of education.
All we have to do is hope for the best, keep our fingers crossed, and hold hands with our imaginary freinds.
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:iconkyuuketsukinoshouzo:
now I know why i hated my school life so much.... :cry:
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