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she's the girl who doesn't talk,
too hurt to say a thing.
she's the girl who misses you,
seeing you makes her heart pang.
she's the girl who hardly cries,
she wants to come off tough.
she's the girl who fakes a smile,
you'd never know her life was rough.
she's the girl who you put last,
but say you love her most.
she's the girl who'd cry & cry,
if you became a ghost.
she's the girl who messes up,
she can't do anything right.
she's the girl who gives up first,
no, she won't win the fight.
she's the girl who'd give everything up,
just to be with you.
she's the girl who needs you most,
the girl you look right through.
the girl who's invisible to you.
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jazewel Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Student General Artist
This is the story of my life.
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Treestorm Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Me.....thats me.....
May i use this on my Deviant ID?
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GrayRosesDayly Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow its like looking in a mirror
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DannyFentonfangirl Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Described my life.
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linwriter Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
Clear description. Well written. Easy to relate to the emotion of this.
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ghost-viper Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012
i love this so much you are so good with poetry
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Nightstripes0987 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Another poetry writer has stolen my diary. Mind if I come up with a little tune to go with it?
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kagurawind Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
I see my self in it too, gosh it's like lookin in the mirror!
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ze1dafreak1 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
(T-T ) This hits waaaay to close to home, and for that, I have to love it. People act like I'm a shadow. Never seen but seeing everything, never heard but hearing everything, never needed but needing everyone. This is beautiful.
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kagurawind Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
Sounds like someone I know
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YouAreMore1 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
.....reminds me of me
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coreena12 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
this reminds me of my self.....
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GalaxyFriday Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2012
Wow, that's beautiful. Exactly like me.
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OverlordAyame Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm sorta like this in school invisible to everyone till some one need me :C

but this is such a beautifull poem like the others :D
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rover-538 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2012
lissen to my comment:i like milkshake;s
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My-two-lives Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012  Student General Artist
theres this guy at school that i really like, but he is my Ex so he doesnt think of me in that way anymore... he loves my best friends big sister (he is a year older than me and she is in his year so yeahs..) , so, not only is he blind but also i know how much he loves her. i can see it in his eyes, i can see it in his smile, but he cant see any of those things in mine.
what i'm getting at is, if you dont mind, may i please sned him this poem for Valentines day? it is exactly how i feel and i have loved him for the last 2 and a half years of my life and i just dont know what to do if i lose him... i wonder if this poem would get my feelings across to him and easier. so yeahs, would you mind if i sned this to him? please? xx :blackrose:
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klex-ur Featured By Owner May 13, 2012
Sorry for reviving an old post, but I wanted to say something when I saw your comment. I'm a guy but I've been in this same situation. It really sucks knowing you have history with a person but they act like none of it happened and instead focus on somebody you know. I don't get how they neglect the past. I hope things are better for you now. By the way, did you send it to him?
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My-two-lives Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Student General Artist
its sad to know that this was happening to you, and so im here for you if you need a shoulder to cry on (sounds wierd, but you get what i mean)
i did send it to him in the end, but because he proved to here how much he cares and because they were so happy togeather i felt bad for sending it to him in the end... and i think that im finally being able to move on as like, obviously hes happy now, and im now going into year 11 so he is now a sixth former... and me and my friend Chris (or Fox im character form XD) love each other, but we said that we will wait untill the end of school because that way we wont have to deal with each other getting hurt by others and that way we dont need to worry about our exams and us getting in each others ways... anywho, (so sorry for the long and late post, blame exams againz XD ) my situation's better nowz, because i have somebody who cares for me and i know that even though im never gonna forget the times i had with Kieran, i can remember what i did wrong so this time, i know that its not gonna have to be the way it was before, because we are all happy in the end... i hope your situations better and im here for you if its not xx :tighthug: :blackrose:
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DesireeSmith Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Wow, I so kno what you mean.
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MaMarsz Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011
This just makes me wanna cry, it just reminds me of myself at school. At 1st grade I was hanging out with the most popular kids but in 2nd grade everything changed. And now I'm in high-school and the popular kids are hanging with my best friends from kindergarten.
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gaaraxdancing Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
God, I love your poetry.
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gakisun4u Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011
you left me speechless, agian. *.*
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nanabana96 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love it, it's so sad, and It reminds me of me :'(
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just7here7to7draw Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2011
reminds me allot of...me...
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foreverdreamer95 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011
So far, I've seen three of your poems. All of them have been painful and grabbing, I really respect your abilities and your style. The poem is like a slice of life, it makes your heart cry out for the invisible girl, because we've all been her at one point. You must have been her, to be able to connect so deeply with her in your poem. You may not know it, but you have a lot of talent. You're doing a fantastic job with your poetry. Good work!
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Jswrongchoice Featured By Owner May 29, 2011
Love it <3 I can relate to it
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AngelousDusk Featured By Owner May 21, 2011
It hurts how much this is true for me, the one people rely on and take for granted but the one whos pain is never noticed and is always seen as the after thought.
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TeamSora255 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i love it. sadly it fits me perfectly. lovely poem though
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TheCat101 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it
very true :)
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UseYourImagination97 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011
That. is. just. like. me. I am so glad i finally found something that expresess how ifeel
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fishcake-y Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2011
Makes me sad....reminds me of myself....
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SilverEyedBeauty Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011  Student General Artist
i know you've probably gotten this alot but I have to say I drastically relate to this poem. The words seem so severe, and I am thouroughly impressed at the way you word this. Truly a work of art. I love it. <3
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i-can-not Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:love: mmmh i like
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LilyTurnedBlack Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2010
my story too... that's just me. thanks!
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flamesandember Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
my life story! 8D
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Jthmfan96 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2010
This one describes me perfectly! It's actually a little spooky O-o Oh well, Very nice work =)
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My-two-lives Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2010  Student General Artist
this made me cry because thats me... i am the invisible girl... you have just described me in a nutshell... wow
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charminator Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, beautiful words. love it
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nawtymunky Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2009
Truly beautiful. C:
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SidselCullen Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2009
That's me!!
nice work there!
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Krissi001 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2009
amazing:aww:
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Nerdyqueen Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
Your poems are beautiful and have so much meaning. This is an amazing poem
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Cocooue Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2009  Student Photographer
i'm lovin' it <3
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Pamplemousse-6 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2009
Wow! Another great poem! And I actually love the rhyming, it keeps the poem flowing. And I can relate.
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hannah-loves-music Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2009   Writer
I LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVE EVERY WORD :D
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Anna52 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2009
If there was ever a better way to describe me it is that, I won't say more than that because there is a story behind it but it is a little long. If you ever wanted to hear I'd be glad but your words are so sympathising and soothing. I wish more people would read this hardly ever will someone listen to the listener. Please if you are someone who has a voice don't forget those who don't. I admire your piece, it is a piece of mind to be heard
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will-darkprincess Featured By Owner May 11, 2008  Student Writer
wow it's beautiful
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Singinchic7 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
beautiful job... I can really relate to it sometimes...
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silverangel38 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2008
amazing concept, maybe a little too heavy on the rhyming...
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brokenxbeauty Featured By Owner May 24, 2008  Student
Hah, I see what you mean. Hooray for honesty. :D
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