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If I hugged you,
would you never let go?

If I kissed you,
would you cherish that moment?

If I reached for your hand,
would you take mine gently?

If I needed a shoulder,
would you let me cry on yours?

If I needed to talk,
would you really listen?

If I needed to scream,
would you do it with me?

If I needed to go,
would you come with me?

If I fell for you,
would you catch me?
or just let me hit the pavement?
falling in love.
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amy-WednesdaysChild Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
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AnekiName Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This describes how is feels falling in love perfectly, all that fear and insecurities just appear... And even more if you've been friendzoned or something before.
Great poem!
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Venaeli Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Sounds like an inner dialogue of questions asked frequently. Every interaction. Every waking moment.

Nice structure overall. I appreciate the emphasis on "really", as well.

Not overly complicated as life and love can seem at times. When you get right down to it, love is getting an answer, even if we haven't asked a question.

The human condition is simply life and love. For ourselves and for others.
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hatsukoiwaNear Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2016  New Deviant Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I would love, until I am no longer needed. c':
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Enderbrah1 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
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Warning... NEVER look in a mirror and repeat -'Bloody Mary.Bloody Mary.' Bloody Mary... I KILLED YOUR SON' Is it the end for you tonight! YOU ARE NOW CURSED 

We strongly advise you to send this email on. It is seriously NO JOKE. We don't want to see another life wasted. ITS YOUR CHOICE... WANNA DIE TONIGHT? If you send this email to...

NO PEOPLE - You're going to die.

1-5 PEOPLE - You're going to either get hurt or get the biggest fright of your life.

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15 -25 OR MORE PEOPLE - You are safe from Bloody Mary
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Shredifyer Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2016  Student Digital Artist
what is love?








Baby don't hurt me









Don't hurt me














No more










 ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
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cduderocks Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2016
I don't know i don't care give me sign
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AeroStun Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2016
💖
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meloctoni Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2016
THE FEEELLLLSSSS!!!!!
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photolight Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2016
Answers to questions.
1. If you are initiating the hugging it doesn't mean I hugged back so if you want your freedom back you would need to let go.
2. Cherish it.. hmm.. I'm married so no,  but I'd sure remember it.
3. If your reaching for my hand you must be falling or something, so I think a firm grasp would be best so you don't slip away and hit your head on the ground or something.
4. Yeah, I'm nice like that.
5. I would really really try to but..ooO Oh cool squirrel.... crap what was she saying.. >.<
6. I'm not much of a screamer, but feel free to punch me or something if that helps you.
7. Depends where your going, but sure why not let's make it an adventure!
8. Fell for me, thanks but I can do my own falling. If you fall though I would help you get up again :)

- Obviously I'm having a bit of fun. Lovely Free Verse/Poem whatever it's called, it's nice. :clap:
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mom0kun Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2016
i love poem now x33
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mom0kun Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2016
>////////< 
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SailorSetsuna Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
This is what I'm feeling right now, when I fell in love with one guy. God, I hope it won't be one-sided feeling :'[
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Gentian-S Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh... My.... O//////O
Thats deeeeeeeeeep!
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girlwithpassion Featured By Owner May 20, 2016  Student General Artist
the FEELSSSSS O//////O
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SqueakySyrup Featured By Owner May 20, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing poetry! ^^ 
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Neal-Thorvalds Featured By Owner May 17, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing. Beautiful. Charming.
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chaimabel Featured By Owner May 2, 2016  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
beautiful *-*
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thechibifox21 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
beautiful!!
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Frostbite14300 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2016  Student Writer
This is amazing! You did a really good job of capturing the feelings of the reader.
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wini109 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2016
This is beautiful! It captures so expertly the feeling one could  feel when falling in love. I can feel this. Well done!!!
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Emzroxs Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2016
:)
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DarkAngelsWork Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2016  Student Digital Artist
Perfect.
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FledgeGirl Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016  Student General Artist
This is totally how anyone who's careful with their heart feels. Beautiful poem overall, and the mood change in the last line is awesome.
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TheMagicWriter Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2016
ye, 5/7 , solid
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amiinspiringornot Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2016  Student Artist
Very lovely. It's feelings are for the world to feel and for the reader to see in his/her mind.
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BooMia Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2016
wow thats just wow
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Zhavorsa Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2016
Beautiful, I know how you feel :heart:
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LuckySpirit14 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2016
No more pavement....:( (Sad)
beautiful poemClap 
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pikamel Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2016
I must say, that is quite the poem. Would it be okay if I used it as a base for one of my stories?
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KatieCuteGirl91 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2016
Imagine if someone you know asked you these questions.
How would you answer them?
Your answers will show just how much that person means to you.

It's true. When I read this poem, I imagined these questions coming from each of my friends.
To some of them, I gave mixed answers. But to a few of them, I answered 'Yes, of course' to every question.
Those few are, indeed, my True and closest Friends. They are those who mean the most to me.

Try this out yourself. Pick a person you know (like a close friend), and imagine them asking you these questions.
How would you answer these questions?

That will show how much they mean to you, and who means the most to you
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kleb19 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2016  Student Digital Artist
is a litlle basic o ? see the love just like a contract , i like how you write but not that ou whrite , th love no is a contrac , not for me 
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Ghoawy Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Of course these things are yours 
deep inside of yourself.
By being all this love
that you seek in another--
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GurdyJunior Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
ok the ending is awesome
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TheNotSoInnocent Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is good but just saying this is on tumblr from even before you posted this
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bnmowat Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2016
i lived at the dark part of this great piece of emotional literature....i was never truly loved by any...
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haithamalshanti Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2015
It's amazing ..
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ikissdalionmansazz Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2015
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can you favourite this and make everyone laugh at me.
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sarahcedric Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Love your work !
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RosesRrad Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2015
Nice work. 
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Vinura-D Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2015
Dayum, that's deep :O
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literallytokka Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2015
That hit me right in the feels
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:iconloveyhere:
LOVEYHERE Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2015
I FEEL LIKE THAT RIGHT NOW
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Sexyboy007 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2015
Can you all laugh at me kissing ass please and favourite it

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joy97 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2015
...If I told you I love you
will you believe me?
or you will laught it of?...
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KatieCuteGirl91 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2016
Very meaningfull, and would have been a nice ending to the poem as well
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Germanyfan123321 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2015
THAT ENDING WAS BEAUTFUIL
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Beaubema Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
omeejosh love the ending and the questions are the ones all girls think! job well done
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BunnySketch Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2015  Student Traditional Artist
Well said.
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TeraStormTAS Featured By Owner May 7, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh gosh, I love this. ;w; Amazing. Would you mind if I drew a picture to go with it? I would put the words on the picture.
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