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If I hugged you,
would you never let go?

If I kissed you,
would you cherish that moment?

If I reached for your hand,
would you take mine gently?

If I needed a shoulder,
would you let me cry on yours?

If I needed to talk,
would you really listen?

If I needed to scream,
would you do it with me?

If I needed to go,
would you come with me?

If I fell for you,
would you catch me?
or just let me hit the pavement?
falling in love.
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:iconthechibifox21:
thechibifox21 Featured By Owner 23 hours ago  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
beautiful!!
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Frostbite14300 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
This is amazing! You did a really good job of capturing the feelings of the reader.
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:iconwini109:
wini109 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2016  New Deviant
This is beautiful! It captures so expertly the feeling one could  feel when falling in love. I can feel this. Well done!!!
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Emzroxs Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2016
:)
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DarkAngelsWork Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2016  Student General Artist
Perfect.
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:iconfledgegirl:
FledgeGirl Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016  Student General Artist
This is totally how anyone who's careful with their heart feels. Beautiful poem overall, and the mood change in the last line is awesome.
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TheMagicWriter Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2016
ye, 5/7 , solid
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amiinspiringornot Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2016  New Deviant Student Artist
Very lovely. It's feelings are for the world to feel and for the reader to see in his/her mind.
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:iconboomia:
BooMia Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2016  New Deviant
wow thats just wow
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:iconzhavorsa:
Zhavorsa Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2016
Beautiful, I know how you feel :heart:
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LuckySpirit14 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2016
No more pavement....:( (Sad)
beautiful poemClap 
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:iconpikamel:
pikamel Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2016
I must say, that is quite the poem. Would it be okay if I used it as a base for one of my stories?
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KatieCuteGirl91 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2016  New Deviant
Imagine if someone you know asked you these questions.
How would you answer them?
Your answers will show just how much that person means to you.

It's true. When I read this poem, I imagined these questions coming from each of my friends.
To some of them, I gave mixed answers. But to a few of them, I answered 'Yes, of course' to every question.
Those few are, indeed, my True and closest Friends. They are those who mean the most to me.

Try this out yourself. Pick a person you know (like a close friend), and imagine them asking you these questions.
How would you answer these questions?

That will show how much they mean to you, and who means the most to you
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kleb19 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2016  Student Digital Artist
is a litlle basic o ? see the love just like a contract , i like how you write but not that ou whrite , th love no is a contrac , not for me 
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Ghoawy Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Of course these things are yours 
deep inside of yourself.
By being all this love
that you seek in another--
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GurdyJunior Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
ok the ending is awesome
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TheNotSoInnocent Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is good but just saying this is on tumblr from even before you posted this
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bnmowat Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2016
i lived at the dark part of this great piece of emotional literature....i was never truly loved by any...
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haithamalshanti Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2015
It's amazing ..
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ikissdalionmansazz Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2015
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can you favourite this and make everyone laugh at me.
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sarahcedric Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Love your work !
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RosesRrad Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2015
Nice work. 
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Vinura-D Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2015
Dayum, that's deep :O
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literallytokka Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2015
That hit me right in the feels
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:iconloveyhere:
LOVEYHERE Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2015
I FEEL LIKE THAT RIGHT NOW
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Sexyboy007 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2015
Can you all laugh at me kissing ass please and favourite it

sxc1.deviantart.com/art/Alex-the-Kissass-570349127
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joy97 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2015
...If I told you I love you
will you believe me?
or you will laught it of?...
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KatieCuteGirl91 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2016  New Deviant
Very meaningfull, and would have been a nice ending to the poem as well
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Germanyfan123321 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2015
THAT ENDING WAS BEAUTFUIL
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Beaubema Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
omeejosh love the ending and the questions are the ones all girls think! job well done
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BunnySketch Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2015  Student Traditional Artist
Well said.
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TeraStormTAS Featured By Owner May 7, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh gosh, I love this. ;w; Amazing. Would you mind if I drew a picture to go with it? I would put the words on the picture.
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cutetango Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nice :3
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badboy1o Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2014
that made me cry .been in true love only once but never got loved back .
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NearCore Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thats beautiful
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firekittenx9 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014
A girl asked a guy if he thought she was pretty and
he
said no. She asked him if he would want to be with her forever and
he
said no. She then asked him if she were to leave would he cry, and
............once
again he replied with a no. She had heard enough. As she walked... See Moreaway, tears streaming down her f......ace the...
... See Moreboy grabbed her arm and said.... You're not pretty
you're beautiful. Idon't want to be with you forever. I NEED to be
with you forever. And Iwouldn't cry if you walked away...I'd die...
♥♥ ~~THE END~~ ♥♥.......Isn't that sweet? Tonight at midnight your
true love willrealize they like you. Something good will happen to
you at 1:00-4:00pm tomorrow, it could be anywhere on IM or email,
outside of school,anywhere! Get ready for the biggest shock of your
life. If you breakthis chain letter you will be cursed with 10
relationship problems forthe next ten years. If you post this to 15
pages in 15 minutes, you're safe
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DoveAngel8 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Chain letters are fake silly
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shelterxofxwinter Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014
I like it so much..I find it so amazing..I'm jealous of your writing :p
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
The end was such a change, and it was perfect. Because this is exactly what goes through my mind when I'm falling in love. I imagine all the good, but then there's always that lingering fear that goes along with feeling vulnerable. Beautiful.
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MystoryDrawer Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Hobbyist
Beautiful simply beautiful
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Nsawatchlist Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Simple but interesting.  I like the poem.
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VanishingPointRacing Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I want to feel to feel that feeling again... I miss her.
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mutantapk Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I sometimes wonder if she feel the same way.
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:iconduck1112:
duck1112 Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
i wonder if he feels that way. :( sometimes i doubt he would. i still love him though <3
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Lilli1221 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I'm in LoVe!!!!!
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JayAnarchist Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014
I've been caught from falling before......but then I was thrown on the pavement. Not very pleasant.
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sushiihamster Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i've hit the pavement before... it's not fun.
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Cassie-Chan0 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Student General Artist
Um...I think I might cry:'( It is utterly beautiful♡
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gilbertbielshmdt Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
. . . Just beautiful. You should get it published as a professional poem~
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